Thesis Statement Exercise

E-ex C2-1 Thesis statements

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Question 1:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.

Your answer:
A recent trend in law enforcement known as "community policing" shows much promise in deterring criminal activity.

Correct answer:
A recent trend in law enforcement known as "community policing" shows much promise in deterring criminal activity.

Score: 1



Question 2:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.

Your answer:
Because air pollution is of serious concern to people in the world today, many countries have implemented a variety of plans to begin solving the problem.

Correct answer:
So far, research suggests that zero-emissions vehicles are not a sensible solution to the problem of steadily rising air pollution.

Score: 0



Question 3:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.

Your answer:
The Sex Pistols were popular with young English audiences, and the singer and lyricist Johnny Rotten was very important to their success.

Correct answer:
The Sex Pistols could not have succeeded without singer and lyricist Johnny Rotten, who provided the stage presence, poetry, and authentic working-class rage that galvanized the group’s young English audiences.

Score: 0



Question 4:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.

Your answer:
Rather than voting for a presidential candidate, voters in a US presidential election merely choose their state’s Electoral College representatives, who actually vote for the president; in most states, all of the electoral votes go to the candidate who wins the popular vote in that state, no matter how close the outcome.

Correct answer:
Because it has become outdated, the electoral college should be replaced by a system that allows the US president to be elected by direct popular vote.

Score: 0



Question 5:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.

Your answer:
This paper presents the results of my investigation into electronic surveillance in the workplace.

Correct answer:
Though employers currently have a legal right to monitor workers’ e-mail and voice mail messages, this practice can have serious effects on employee morale.

Score: 0



Question 6:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.

Your answer:
In his autobiographical Narrative, Frederick Douglass draws on techniques used in popular texts of his day—sentimental literature, the Bible, and rip-roaring oratory—to persuade his audience to reject slavery.

Correct answer:
In his autobiographical Narrative, Frederick Douglass draws on techniques used in popular texts of his day—sentimental literature, the Bible, and rip-roaring oratory—to persuade his audience to reject slavery.

Score: 1



Question 7:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.

Your answer:
Although they are widely ignored and derided as mindlessly violent, video games are a form of popular art that deserves to be evaluated as seriously as television and film.

Correct answer:
Although they are widely ignored and derided as mindlessly violent, video games are a form of popular art that deserves to be evaluated as seriously as television and film.

Score: 1



Question 8:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.

Your answer:
Judges should have discretion in sentencing drug offenders so that those convicted of nonviolent or first-time offenses do not automatically go to prison.

Correct answer:
Judges should have discretion in sentencing drug offenders so that those convicted of nonviolent or first-time offenses do not automatically go to prison.

Score: 1



Question 9:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.

Your answer:
The U.S. system of taxation is unfair to taxpayers who have worked hard all their lives to provide a secure future for their families.

Correct answer:
Instead of repealing the estate tax altogether, Congress should raise the current exemption significantly, to two million dollars, so that wealthy estates are taxed but those of the vast majority of Americans are not.

Score: 0



Question 10:
Click on the sentence that would work better as a thesis statement for a two-to-five-page college paper. Remember that a thesis should be a central idea that requires supporting evidence; it should be of adequate scope for a two-to-five-page paper; and it should be sharply focused.

Your answer:
The social service system in Metropolis has broken down because today’s workers are underpaid, poorly trained, and overworked.

Correct answer:
The social service system in Metropolis has broken down because today’s workers are underpaid, poorly trained, and overworked.

Score: 1



Number of questions attempted: 10
Number of questions correct: 5
Percentage score: 50%

Lesson 8

Quaker Chewy
Low Fat Chocolate Chunk
90 Calorie Granola Bars

The strongest argument of this package would probably be that it is “low fat chocolate chunk”
The “90 Calories” is what would prompt me to buy it again because it is chocolate, but low on calories and fat. It doesn’t get much better than that.

My visual for my research paper is Rosie the Riveter saying “We can do it”
I found that this picture will support my research as to how women became equal in the workforce.

Memo

M E M O R A N D U M


Date: 20 March 2008

To: Romina Kline, ENGL111X Instructor

From: Cassie R. Carlsen, ENGL111X Student

Re.: Research Paper Topic and Thesis

I have developed an interest in women’s roles in history and would like to do my research paper on working women in the 1940s and their transition to housewives in the 1950s. I would like to research why women who did not want to give up their jobs did, was someone forcing them to?

I am currently seeking information on my research topic from our public library and the internet. My targeted audience is women who would like to learn how women became equal in the workforce and the driving force behind it.

Please approve topic before Friday 28 March 2008. Thank You

Lesson 7

The audience that my essay is directed toward is people who believe that global warming is all natural and not at all human induced. In my essay I state facts and show studies on evidence which proves humans are the main contributors to global warming. My thesis is that individuals need to be educated and on how to decrease pollution and other factors which contribute to the earth’s climate change. I believe the audience will be persuaded by my claims because of the evidence and backup to my argument. I think that my evidence and sources are reliable and my audience will find the studies helpful in educating them on prevention of global warming.

http://ashley-lynn-06.blogspot.com
She is having a hard time getting into the whole blog thing.
http://fsmks1engl111.blogspot.com
This web address would not display at first but after a few tries I was able to get there. She has only posted 1 blog.
http://fsjlb34.blogspot.com/
Has posted no blogs
michellejax@blogspot.com
does not exist
http://eskimovampire.blogspot.com
Has one blog
I didnt post any comments

Bush pix

In the first image of President Bush, he is shown clearing brush on a hot Texas day. The image portrays Bush as an average Texan doing everyday labor work like many hardworking Americans. The cowboy hat shows that he is a typical Texan. This image emphasizes that he is a hard worker.
In the second photo of Bush greeting a crowd at a press conference suggest that Bush is down to earth and jumps right into the crown to become one of us. The elderly woman in this photo makes me think she is his mom, showing his love for family. The girl standing behind Bush looks frightened, maybe a metaphor for Bush being a protector of Americans, Americans being all of the people behind him.
The third photo of Bush standing in from of Mount Rushmore jumped out at me the most. Bush is incorporated into the monument of the most historical leaders in history. The upward angle of the photo suggests leadership and control.

Lesson 5

As said in the previous blog, I prefer using idea mapping and pros and cons for my prewriting because I have used them in the past. Idea mapping helps when putting the essay together. You already have the layout for your paper. I do not like the freewriting style of prewriting because it is hard to combine all of the ideas once they are down on paper in no particular format. During this lesson I have learned that it is much more helpful to do more than one prewriting activity. When I sat down and wrote out ideas for both sides of the argument, it gave me better ideas for a thesis. I would like to know what prewriting techniques the other student prefer. I have learned that Mrs. Kline knows how helpful previewing and prewriting is and that is why it is incorporated into each lesson.

Lesson 4

The supporting evidence I used for my claim in lesson four was from personal experience. My essay was on success and I found it much more beneficial to use personal experience for this claim. The research I did on success did not help much. I think my essay on success would get a 8/10. The subject was not easy to develop into an argument. I felt that idea mapping and using pros and cons list were the most helpful prewriting teqniques I used. I have used these teqniques in the past and felt most comfortable with them. I had help from a co-worker with the revision process because I had a hard time getting started. The goal of my argument was that if you work hard for something you really want, and if you put everything you have into that task, you will succeed. Previewing the text is helpful for me because it gives me an idea of how I will develop the argument and essay structor.

Journal 2/17/08

About twenty years ago a couple where driving home after a night out and got into a terrible accident. The wife walked away from the accident, but the husband, unfortunately received brain damage. Concerned of becoming a burden to his loving wife, John moved to Kodiak to try and start a new life and let Jane continue hers without the worries of having to care for him. After years of therapy, John was able to live a normal day to day life, although from a strangers point of view John would come across as “weird” or “retarded”. Upon introducing himself to someone he would say, “Hi, I’m John and I was in an accident so you may think I’m a little strange” John soon developed multiple sclerosis and went downhill from there. He got mixed up with the wrong crowds just trying to fit in.

It was February 4th and John decided to go out and celebrate his 43rd birthday with friends. An argument broke out and somehow John ended up getting stabbed four times in the head. His assailants continued to beat him until the police arrived at which time everybody scattered. John was in a coma for six days until doctors decided to discontinue life support. He survived one day, then passed peacefully.

To this day, authorities do not have any suspects in custody. There was a quick blurb in the news paper about the assault and that was that. The whole incident has been kept quiet and nothing has ever come of it. I am disappointed in the way the authorities handled the situation. They know who was at the house that night and still don’t have enough evidence to charge anybody with the terrible crime committed that night. Most of all, I am disappointed by the lack of information which has been provided to the community. I understand authorities do not want to jeopardize the investigation by providing information, but it is a small community, and I’m sure someone can lead them in the right direction if only they asked.

Lesson2 Journal

I think using a blog for a journal is a great idea. I am having trouble posting my URL on Blackboards, discussion board. I called Blackboard tech help and am currently downloading Mozilla Firefox. My URL will be posted once I am able to post to the discussion board.
Lesson 1 was difficult at first. I haven't wrote an essay since high school and it took a bit for it all to come back. The pre-writing assignment helped me layout my ideas for the essay. The resume assigment for Lesson 2 will be challenging, but I look forward to it.